hm. instead of a candy bar make it that new cd from the fave band, or that 20$ shampoo bottle that is suppose to give you "luscious cascading waves with the scent of flowers" lol. something more believable because teens nowadays dont want candy bars. especially when they see the mags of In Shape or Glamour just above them. i mean kind of intimidating when you see someone like Megan Fox on the cover right when your about to eat chocolate. The writing is a bit amateurish, but its decent so not terrible. Just work on it more. So far its interesting though. good luck =]
Oh, what did Della wear boy, What did Della wear? What did Della wear boy, What did Della wear?
She wore a bran’ new jersey, She wore a bran’ new jersey, She wore a bran’ new jersey, That’s what she did wear.
One, two, three, four!
Oh, why did Calla ‘phone ya, Why did Calla phone? Why did Calla ‘phone ya, Was she all alone? She called to say how ar’ ya, She called to say how ar’ ya, She called to say how ar’ ya, That’s why she did call.
Uno, dos, tres, cuatro! ( Spanish )
Oh, what did Mrs sip, boy, What did Mrs sip? What did Mrs sip, boy, Through her pretty lips? She sipped a mina-soda, She sipped a mina-soda, She sipped a mina-soda, That’s what she did sip.
Un, deux, trois, quatre! ( French )
Oh, where as Ore gone, boy, Where has Ore gone? If you want, I’ll ask ‘er, I’ll ask ‘er where she’s gone She went to pay her taxes, She went to pay her taxes, She went to pay her taxes, That’s where she has gone.
Eins, zwei, drei, vier! ( German )
Oh, how did Wiscon sin, boy, She stole a new brass key, Too bad that Arkan saw, boy, And so did Tenne see? It made poor Flora die, boy, It made poor Flora die, you see, She died in misery, boy, She died in misery.
Oh, what did Della wear boy, What did Della wear? What did Della wear boy, What did Della wear?