Would you keep reading this? ?
I'm not sure what it is yet. The muse just attacked and I couldn't stop writing. I wrote more, but this is just the beginning. Tell me what you think and whether you'd keep reading!
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“That one looks like a heart,”
“No, it doesn’t. It looks like a kidney.”
“Whatever; but you can’t deny that that one over there looks just like a sheep!”
“They all look like sheep, Di.”
There were a few moments of silence before the sniggers broke through and the two girls lying in the grass began to roll around in laughter. The luscious grass was perfectly cut and the prettiest shade of green—that’s not much of a surprise, the Morrison family always kept their backyard clean.
One of them squinted against the bright rays of the afternoon sunshine, and suddenly turned to the girl next to her. “I’m going to miss this, Jess,” she said, deliberately staring hard at the grass and picking at random the primped and preened lawn.
“What’s there to miss, Di? A town with a whopping population of three thousand and twenty-three people, and the best pizza shop in the state?” Jess responded, a tint of jealousy colouring her voice.
“I grew up here. There’s a lot to miss. Most of all, you, Jess. I’m going to miss you,” with that, she looked up at her best friend. To her shock, she saw tears brimming. “Oh, Jess. C’mon, I’m not worth crying over.”
Jess laughed, a sort of bitter sad sound, and sniffed. She wiped at her eyes with the side of her thumb, and shrugged. “You’re worth a lot to me,” she offered with a small smile.
Her friend rolled her eyes and laughed, nudging Jess playfully. “Don’t go getting all sappy on me,” she warned in a mock-serious voice. Di stood up, all five foot nine of her, and brushed the grass off her clothes. “Let’s go inside; I think we bought ice cream yesterday... if Jack hasn’t devoured it all,” she added in a teasing voice, knowing her friend’s addiction to all goodies frozen and sweet.
“Oh, fair Delilah, you have found the path to this maiden’s heart!” Jess exclaimed dramatically and stood up only to throw her arms around Di’s neck dramatically.
Di laughed, and patted her friend’s back. “Jess,”
“Yeah?”
“Shut up.”
“OK,”
Di threw her arm around Jess’ shoulder as the two of them trudged back toward her house to eat immense amounts of ice cream and coax Jack into relinquishing his turn on the PlayStation.
“Di,”
“Yeah?”
“You have grass stains on your butt.”
Do NOT answer with 'too long' or something.
If you didn't read it, don't answer.
And, yes, I know there's some repetition and grammar bugs, but that'll get fixed. =]
Thanks for the answers so far!