Will you critique my monologue?

I have been developing this monologue for an audition into my school's varsity/JV Theatre department and so I was wondering if you could give me some constructive...or just plain criticism on it. Just don't be rude about it, thanks.
The monologue is from William Shakespeare's play, As You Like It, where I will be portraying the role of Phebe. It says so in the video so please watch and tell.


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3Jkhi3oQOPg

2010-03-29T19:43:20Z

Matthew: What does that mean?

2010-03-29T20:09:54Z

oh. oh. Got it! haha. Thank you so much. Well If I were to stand, (unfortunately my sister took my camera so I was forced to use a laptop) I was thinking about adding sort of a pace back and forth between my conflicting words. Maybe this will help in communicating the contradictions in the piece...?

Matthew P2010-03-29T19:34:07Z

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Brain Testing2010-04-06T20:48:57Z

We are advised that you have removed your Monologue and so ends this Dialogue