alone she stands this Beautiful bay mare
away from the herd she started to stare
legs standing ready just ready for flight
nostrils flared slightly a Beautiful sight
she dips her head and starts to graze
with her 4 white sox and a large white blaze
being in charge of the herd isnt a game
this beatiful bay mare nivanna by name
r.i.p. niz gone but never forgotten
what breed of horse do you have
age and colour thanx best ask a question lol
Anonymous
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That is soo good! You could use commas every 5 sylables which will slow the whole thing down which gives you time to imagine it as calm and tranquil ;)
Edit: And you could replace the and with a comma which will make it one whole flow instead of breaking up the sentence.
It's great!
horsegurl
Wow nice poem, R.I.P Niz sorry you had to lose her!
I have a 14.2hh bay Standardbred 6yr old mare named Poppy. She is gorgeous and really cute! I have a really good bond with her and when i got her she didn't know how to do very much but i have trained her and now she is jumping 60cm and hopefully one day 1m 20.
bribri91
awwwwwwwwww thats REALLY good you must have been really close to her! i sorry for your loss i like the poem i wish that i could write like that the only thing i would change is when you say
"with her 4 white sox and a large white blaze" i would change it to
with her 4 white sox's and a large white blaze because if you are saying she had 4 white sox's you would make it plural
but other than that GREAT
i have a AQH named cider he is 12 and is a dark brown with a medium white blaze he is a really sweet boy!
Jane
This poem is really amazing, much better than I could do haha! I think you should capitalize the beginning of each line, and change 4 to the actual word four. But yeah, it was really good!
Anonymous
Awwwwww:$,i like it it is amazing
R.I.P mandi's nizâ¥(horse)
sorry for ur lost:)
you poem is,wow i am speechless really!