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I am a normal teen-age-high-school-girl with long black hair, blue eyes, and tan skin. Well actually I am a great athlete, very smart, and people say that I’m the smartest prettiest athlete they have ever seen, but I don’t take it seriously. I play basketball, soccer, and I run. I have races and games every day but I enjoy it so it’s okay with me.

ok so inned help disidein to somewhat copy eather

-hunterxhunter: She finds out her not so dead dad is alive and is a hunte so she tries to be one to

-law of ueki: She is granted a power to fight people with other powers but has unknown powes of her own she fights fo justice and if they hert people who ant in the battle they get a talent tooken away a talent is something you born with and if you get a power you get to know how many talents you have anyway they fight to get the talent of ______ AKA any thing they chose. the people who ganted the power to the winning power user gets to be king of the univers. 

so wich one 1 or 2 or 3 a mix between the two and tell me what parts should be miced
tell me why you chose what you chose

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Tan skin and black hair mixed with blue eyes is not very common. It is a very unusual and rather impossible mix of pigmentation. Your character is also a Mary-Sue. It is very unlikely that many people would say that someone is the "smartest", "prettiest", and the best "athlete" they've ever seen. She doesn't seem to have a very big ego, which is kind of unusual considering she knows that everyone says she is smart, pretty, and a great athlete. 

I don't really like either of the ideas, but that is partially because I could barely read your writing. The notification at the right of the question that says, "You have __ misspelling(s)!" is not for nothing, you know.

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They are okay. They are pretty common things to write about. The first story option is painfully cliche. Also, you need to work on punctuation. Like when you list the things the character posses you use commas. The second one I would just dump right now. The third one just sounds so basic you can already tell the ending. You also have a lot of work to do on your spelling. You really need to enhance all of them, then come back and ask. But right now, I'd go with the first option. But make your main character at least likable. She sounds like a self absorbed athlete/girly girl.

Don't use your age as an excuse. When you get older better ideas aren't just going to pop into your head. When I was nine I had a regular column in a newspaper, so no, you don't get slack because of your age.

Don't use your age as an excuse. When you get older better ideas aren't just going to pop into your head. When I was nine I had a regular column in a newspaper, so no, you don't get slack because of your age.

is my book good !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1?

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