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I hate this town. Its too filled with memories I'd rather forget. I go to school everyday, hang out with my friends, and then I go home. There's no place i'd rather not go ever again. I wonder if anything will change....will that day ever come. This is a world that has ended. It's cold. Nothing is born and nothing dies. Not even passing time exists. If i were looking for somewhere to be born, I don't think I would choose this world. And in this world, such as it is, it's filled with loneliness and despair, a place where people talk without speaking, a place where people hear without listening. I wonder if a time will come where all this darkness will light up, i hope that a person will come that will save me from myself, we will go to a place that is warm and everyday something new and exciting happens, yeah a place were wishes come true. By the way these are my true feeling too.

Anonymous2012-08-15T11:28:57Z

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This is more like a brooding monologue, but still good

Write Brain2012-08-15T18:34:51Z

It sounds more like someone complaining and whining than it does a story. Your sentences do nothing to move the story forward.

You also have many spelling and grammar issues.