Does this sentence make sense and is it ok?

“I think this Burger King location on Jessup Street  in St Charles is full of incompetent bunglers, Especially the ‘manager’, Pete. 

Benny Fitz2021-04-07T19:03:28Z

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Lower case e on especially.

?2021-04-07T19:06:27Z

It's the kind of snarky review that readers overlook because the person clearly has a personal ax to grind. Don't insult people- tell your experience. If it was bad, the reader will get the point. Putting quotation marks around "manager" is just childish.