Is this poem okay?

OK, there are some good ideas here, but they are simple and strong, rather than intellectual, so I find your use of quite formal language quite "clunky" eg: "Determined for a different life" is not gramatically correct, which doesn't matter in itself, but it makes the reader pause, and wonder if it is deliberate (is it ?)

In a short work, like a poem, your reader should be sure that every word is carefully chosen and apt.

Too many clichés (state of mind; political upheaval; turning point, etc,) The great thing about good poetry is the unexpected use of language - so throw up a few original images of your own please

My suggestion (because fundamentally, I like this) is to try writing an explanation of your poem for an intelligent 10 year old, then incorporate some of that simple, straighforward language into your poem

"The Revolutionary process in it's evolution,

often causes regression, rather than positive solutions.

Those who offer up the stated cause are often joined

by the uninformed, without a moments pause,

AND those who lead so often claim their goal is to set us free,

When often then, we remain imprisoned, just in some different reality."

Obviously you've touched on the ideals of BETTER, but history proves many revolutions never offered that status.

Steven Wolf

just my two "sense"