Is this a good start on my story?

This isnt my first time writing a story but most of the time i never finish them.This time it's different i really like the story (i have been practically been day dreaming about for acouple years) but i have so many different alternative veiws of it that i thought i should ask you guys.

This takes place in Hogwarts and every person who has ever seen Harry Potter should know what i am talking about.If there are any fans out there i would like your opinion the most!Thanks!

Also before i begin i should explain that this takes place during the time harry's parents were in their mid 6th or beging 7th year.

option 1 (begining of 7th year):

Confussion struck me like lightning.It was no good trying to get out of it.I sighed, What was i going to do?keep my secret to myself or tell someone or tell someone?"sigh"

I left my thoughts and came back to reality.I was on platform 9 3/4,awaiting for yet another year of hogwarts.The magnificent hogwarts express stood gleaming before me.It whisstled and hollored,letting everyone know its prescence.Sunlight poured in,shinning brightly on the great red machiene.People from all directions crowded the "secret station",talking,shouting laughing and saying goodbye.Many people were allready on board,including my close friends,Lilly Evans,Alice Longbottom,and megan rose.

I never quite finished the beging to this one.If you like this one better tell what i could do to make it better.

Option 2 (mid 6th year):

In my mind it was pointless and a waste of my precious time,but i couldn't help myself.Thoose brown eyes that were filled with wonder,compassion,and laughter (how i loved thoose)and his brown wavy hair,that always seeemed to blow in the wind;were hypmotising.

"Natilee" whispered Lilly Evans,one of my closest friends.

Pulling me back ito reality,i sighed.How long was it going to take the others that i loved him?

"Natilee?!"whispered Lilly

"hum?"

"Who were you just staring at?"she said with a smirk on her face.

I stared into her emerald green eyes.I knew,that she knew that i liked one of the maunders.Her problem was she just couldn't figure it out.

I said rather plainlly "no one ,that notice on the board intrested me ."

Whichwas true.The notice was the date of the try-outs.Rumor was that their was a new chaser,who might be better take my spot if captain choose her.This too woried me.Quiditich was my passion and i wouldn't know how to survive without it.

Lilly noticedthe change in my voice and decied that my "love relationship" had to go on hold.

"Which one?"

"The one about tryouts"i said sulkily

"Oh Natilee,don't worry about that.I'm shure you'll still be chaser once try-outs are over."

"But how can you be sure.I mean...............well haven't you seen her;she's good."

"No, but Lee you're really good and i bet you even better."

I gave her a look that screamed depression.

"Just ask Sirus or James."she said rather coolily.

I bet that she only said that to figure out who i liked.

"Lilly i do.I understand that you are worrying too much about this."she said

"oh fine, you win!I'm not worried about that!"I yelledin desperation"Well.....I am worried about that just not as much about....something else."

A wide smile spred across her whole face.That was what she was planning on all along.How could i think for one moment i could fool her!Now she expected an answer.

"so which one is it?she said'a wide grin dtill ethiched on her face

I was too angry to answer...............or was that i still couldn't face the fact that I loved Lupin?

"Oh lee,please tell me!"she was praticclly begging now

"I-I like ..........................."I stamered

"Who?"

"No one."I said and stormed off.

As looked behind,I saw Lupin look over his shoulder;at me.

If you like that one better explain what i could do better.

For more of an explaniton as to why the two are way off compared to each other i will tell you why.Ok so Natilee Lestrange is not the typical Lestrange and her parents hated her for that.Ever since they found out that she was a Griffindor they have been planning to do something too her.So during spring break of her 6th year she is told to go home instead of staying at hogwarts.And during spring break she becomes a death eater.I hope that clears it up. Sorry my speling is horrible and the spell check isnt working.