Would you please read a Memorial Day, metrically flawed poem?

Question

I'm not afraid to write flawed poems when I want to express something. What about you? Do you want to put all poetry in a box?

OCTOBER SUNDAY 10-10-10
(Repeat after me)
by Elaine

Ten…ten…ten…hut!
The Earth’s become
A sand-filled rut!

It’s a Day Memorial,
Soldiers, step forwardial,
Remember yesterday!

We can’t remember yesterday,
The same thing’s happening today,
Oh, how I wish war’d go away!

We all love our dear country,
Whichever our country may be,
Marching to our destiny!

Ten…ten..ten…hut!
We all die in desert smut,
The Earth’s become 
A sand-filled rut…

Anonymous · Accepted Answer

Why Ms. P, you are almost flawed enough here to be 'Beautifully Broken'(TM)(c)LC

My son has seen those sands beneath his feet and I only thank the stars he isn't beneath it.

? · Answer

I liked it Elaine,

I cannot explain

To ignite the peculiar

To write the unusualar (New word)

All require the wit

Of a well formed poem

Whatever that may be

One two or perhaps even three ?

Good Luck.

Best Wishes.

Mars Mission. (Earth).

14th Year Psychology Student.

4th Year Hypnotism Student.

4th Year Self Taught Music Student.

32 Years Qualified Automotive Technician.

Anonymous · Answer

Where did the sand come from? I didn't put it there. But, as usual, I will be asked to clean it up...hehehe

❤ ❤bidadari-AlHurun&#39;in❤ ^-^ ❤ ❤ · Answer

I already see a lot of news in the world about that day...:-D

Btw, everyday we must show about our love, our good heart for me... 

btw, great poem, dear!
me too, very sad thinking about this earth.... :-|

good luck!

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Would you please read a Memorial Day, metrically flawed poem?

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