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A recent topic that comes from science and medicine that interest me comes from the Film My Sisters Keeper. One child was created threw Vitro fertilization, to be a perfect match for her ill older sister. In some ways, I feel that the idea is a bit unethical when the procedure for this reason. Normally when people use vitro fertilization, no assistant reproductive technology will help produce a baby. However the move took this idea to the next level doctors could actually make a genetic copy of another child threw this method. I love science, but when science is used to in this aspect, it bothers me. Sure, you are saving someone another person’s life, but at what price.

Changes

1.delete the word comes (the second one) and use is

2. don't capitalize film. It needs to be lower cased

3. change the word (the) (third sentence) to this

4. delete (when the procedure for this reason) and use the word because and continue the sentence by deleting normally.

*In some ways, I feel that this idea is a bit unethical because when people use vitro fertilization, no assistant reproductive technology will help produce a baby.

5. However,

6 move (spelled wrong) should be movie

7. Split into two sentences

*However, the movie took this idea to the next level. Doctors (delete could) actually (change make to made) made a genetic copy of another child through (you have threw..which is to throw something) this method.

8. I love science, but when it goes to the extreme, it bothers me.

9. Sure, you are saving another person's life, but at what price?

Hope that makes since with the way I wrote it.

Blessings

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