Song lyrics for your opinion. What do you think of my work?

It's kind of Dave Matthews meets Hal Ketchum. Here goes:

Square One

Sundown becomes sunset fast

The future becomes the past

Lists of dreams that didn't last

The die of fate is cast

Another day come and gone

Always back to Square One

The Spinners, Bob Seger then Kid Rock

On sale items go out of stock

Doors open, then they lock

Constant circling of the clock

The chimes ring in a steady run

Always back to Square One

On and on and on and on and on

On and on and on and on and on

Fashion picks another style

Signposts add another mile

Shredded papers from a file

More changes all the while

You win some, and you lose some

Always back to Square One

Birth, nurtured, until grown

Another promised seed is sown

Try to learn all the unknown

Black then green then brown the lawn

A little more rain, a little sun

Always back to Square one

On and on and on and on and on

On and on and on and on and on

Proud parents' daughter or son

First lose innocence then the fun

You're lonesome, you choose someone

Lucky at love and then it's gone

Spiral down the heart forlorn

Just to find a better one

All the power of King Kong

Hopeful scavengers led along

Until your call to life is done

Always back to Square One

Always back to Square One

Laughing Dolphin Music

March 22, 2012