Please rate my freestyle poem?

yeah I totally agree the double spacing is distracting and adds no impact or emphasis in this case at least.

I have a couple more suggestions though, and I'm a brat so forgive me.

While I am deeply in love with another, love poems are not my fave genre as they are so often cliche.

Heart for example is so overused, and I get it as poetic license, but in essence it's a pump

Your second line alludes in fact to logic and love may be the most irrational emotion anyone can experience, but beyond that the second line is a lie (no offense to you) but love often leads us astray..

Do we really listen to logic?

I get it you are working a rhyme scheme but........

You could do without noon,,,it is part of day.

"Now the science of logic would say that"

Um is logic a science? I mighta said logic without the "now the science"

The next line, and again no offense, sounds like it was borrowed from Spock on star trek

The rest became muddy so I just have one more,

No maybe two, ladies and guys????

"making risks" ??? why not taking risk and chances, ONLY?

Oh and BTW, No one really wins in the game, we can only gamble and sometimes claim fleeting fame.

I really dint mean to beat you up, forgive me, and I should not have answered this, so feel free to disregard me.

I do not understand why some ladies are so generous with their grading.

8/10 means that you are 2 points below perfection, you must be very happy that your script was that far from one of Shakespeare or Homer.

My opinion:

This is just an abstract thought, not a poem. It contains none of the rules of poetry not even some poetically matched words, phrases, concepts. It is desperately undefined, poor and deserted, a mambo jumbo of lines that have nothing new to say, just a silly old cliche: Think with your heart! We already think with our heart, it is programmed in our cells, and we call it "sentimentalism". How would you call it? Anything else? Yes, you condemn the science of logic as the source of illness and unhappiness. Maybe you played too much basketball my friend and it made you confused:

Take this advise from me: Do never underestimate something you cannot do.

Your abstract? (That's what a poet would name it):

1/10. Under the logic that I posted a 5/10 today being kinda "out of shape"

8 out of 10. Your spacing is not helping you.

about a 7 and a half. I did not like the spacing and you could have used more punctuation