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How is this for an ending?
I'm nearing the end of my novel, and I have an idea for the last paragraph, but it's pretty cheezy. The novel is called An Ideal Place.The It's about a girl who moves to the small town of Kennewick with her family in the late 1800s. She hates it, and throughout the whole story as they are trying to survive, she is trying to make herself feel like it is home. Anyhow, here's the tentative last paragraph. Suggestions?
I never did get a chance to really say that I had made it, and I do not aim to do so until the moment I draw my last.Things have a habit of going wrong when one does. There would aways be times when I would hate Kennewick. I just had to remind myself that it was home. I no longer needed the lullaby of the advertisement, or the sight of Mama's chair, or the smell of dishwater. It was home. By the stubborn Clester blood in my veins, it was home, and home is an ideal place.
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- 8 years agoFavorite Answer
It's amazing! Are you selling any books yet? Sounds like a pretty good book! I definitely think it's a good ending please publish it!(:
Source(s): Me - 8 years ago
It is okay but when you write the last paragraph of a book or novel you need to (Without summarizing) write an ending that makes all the memories from even the beginning of the book to come flooding back, an ending that leaves you hanging and makes the readers cry, not because the ending is sad but because they realized that the book is over, and they have to stop reading it.
But remember this, No matter what I say if this is the ending you connect with in spirit and in heart, then you should keep this ending, because the most important thing is that you put your heart into your writing.
- roderick_youngLv 78 years ago
The last phrase "and home is an ideal place" does not seem to fit for two reasons. One, the reset of the paragraph is in past tense, and this is in present perfect. Also, it seems like a detached philosophical statement, in what seems to be a reflective, sentimental, nostalgic line of thought. I suggest something like "..my veins, it was home. My home." might have more impact. You can find your own words, but since these are the last words of the book, they will leave a disproportionate impression on the reader. She has finally embraced the place as her home. Seize the opportunity!
- 8 years ago
really love your style of writing! interesting phrasing. and when you say draw your last- do you mean draw your last breath? if not you might want to say what as to clear any confusion( unless you can know from the rest of the novel and I don't have the full story) other poise I like it your novel sells well!
Source(s): a bookworm and a fellow writer
