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What do you think of my work?

Him

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He was

Tall, fair skinned, intelligent, and mine

In the race for first place

He left

All others behind

Capsuled in my arms

He didn’t

Fight to get away

Right there

Against my chest

He was happy

To stay

Some of you

May find this difficult

To wrap your head

Around it

But y’all

Sweat the small stuff

He’s the other

Half of

My soul

And I’m so glad

I found it

Now comes

The tough part

Can our relationship

Withstand it

Or will

We wither away

Like Pluto

Which is no longer a planet

I believe

I have faith

And a surplus

Of conviction

Say whatever you may

Through it all I’m staying

With him

Some of you

May find this difficult

To wrap your head

Around it

But y’all

Sweat the small stuff

He’s the other

Half of

My soul

And I’m so glad

I found it

The day has finally come

For us to begin a new life

Pride

Respect

And devotion

Y’all need a new life

We’ve talked about kids

Where we’ll live

The whole nine yards

What’s mine is his

And what’s his

Becomes ours

It’s the year 2014

Y’all need to get with

The times

Leave your prior notions

In the past

And

Leave ‘em behind

Some of you

May find this difficult

To wrap your head

Around it

But y’all

Sweat the small stuff

He’s the other

Half of

My soul

And I’m so glad

I found it

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  • 7 years ago
    Favorite Answer

    Love your chorus in those three places, but Pluto is the wrong comparison. Try an ice age dwindling away slowly.

  • Anonymous
    7 years ago

    You should apply to the mfa program at Columbia (new York) with me next year, if you can.

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