Here's my newest attempt at the poetry writting, any thoughts ?

Question

ATOMIC ERA

I fail to see the sense of life
and life might have no sense at all,
with children starving, peoples fight
what stands today tomorrow'll fall.

You may not live to see it comin', 
the storm of Hell to doom our fate,
hope generation which is comming,
might come to sense before too late.

We never seem to learn enough,
from wrongs and evil that we make,
the eagerness some people show
for doing good is mostly fake...

The brief existance that we live,
the things we cherish seem so real,
tomorrow comes and brand new day
shall see new ordeals unreel...

Anonymous · Accepted Answer

As long as it's yours, it's good, keep it up. Keep in mind poetry doesn't always have to rhyme as long as it has a theme.

? · Answer

Poetry is the spiritual language of the soul. The spiritually deep awakened and enlightened tend to wax lyrical more articulately and eloquently than most with lucid emotion than simple creative writing or expression of thoughts

Cogito · Answer

* writting * ??

Sorry, but the rhymes are forced, it doesn't scan ... I could go on.

SKITTZO · Answer

It is an OK story but has misspelled words.
Also tomorrow'll is better as tomorrow will.

Anonymous · Answer

"Hell," "doom," teen angst, forced rhymes, puke.

? · Answer

Yes. My thoughts are "Aaaaarrghhh!"

Anonymous · Answer

The first stanza is the cliché and predictable pessimism we've come to predict from students. The rest of your writing is also dreck. Bleh!

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Here's my newest attempt at the poetry writting, any thoughts ?

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