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  • What do you think of my hidden-acrostic sonnet "Necessary"?

    I was aiming to meld my two biggest literary influences: William Shakespeare and Edgar Allan Poe. To get the message hidden within the sonnet (in iambic pentameter, I might add), it is the first letter of the first line, the second letter of the second line, and so one. But since my message was a little too long for the form, included are the last two words of the last line. Enjoy!

    Necessary

    Such tears, all flowed, have tired my eyes and heart.

    Where others held success as I had none,

    There hoped a bosom cored of reasoned art

    For instances made true had smiles begun

    To fissure ice and armoured shells turned rust;

    But none I knew sustained the gauntlet Time.

    And none maintained their days to earn a trust,

    Just processed thoughts a-swirl in rhyme.

    From ponderous beginnings never seen—

    For man (presumed) hung by queries and jest—

    A beauty did shine where none before had been;

    And I, unseen, bartered stone ’n my chest

    If only she approved th’ guarantee

    Made desperate, yearn as I, and she for me.

    3 AnswersPoetry9 years ago
  • What is a "L.P. COPYRIGHT"?

    Someone on a poetry site I frequent is concerned another someone is stealing his poetry. Finding one of his poems copied on another site and linked to a book of poetry, "LP Copyright" was found on the bottom of the copy and was wondering what it meant. I, so far, have been unable to locate a definition.

    3 AnswersPoetry9 years ago
  • What is a "L.P. COPYRIGHT"?

    Someone on a poetry site I frequent is concerned another someone is stealing his poetry. Finding one of his poems copied on another site and linked to a book of poetry, "LP Copyright" was found on the bottom of the copy and was wondering what it meant. I, so far, have been unable to locate a definition.

    1 AnswerLaw & Ethics9 years ago
  • Will you please c/c my poem "Thank You"?

    Thank You

    Thank you, Sadism

    Thank you, Masochism

    you have shown me

    the faces of misery

    Thank you, Disillusionment

    Thank you, Irreverence

    you have taught me

    to have thoughts

    free of other people’s slobber

    Thank you to everyone who has

    walked through my head

    Thank you to everyone who dared

    not to travel that twisting path

    Thank you to my scars

    Thank you to my tears

    for carving your memories

    so they will not be forgotten

    Thank you, Heartache

    Thank you, Desire

    for teaching me to want

    for teaching me to cherish

    Thank you, Clarity

    Thank you, Time

    for allowing me to forgive

    myself

    Thank you, Silence

    3 AnswersPoetry9 years ago
  • Please comment on my Poem?

    I wrote this about 10 years ago while taking a literature class in college. This is a parody of another [famous] piece.. John Donne predominantly wrote about three things: religion, death, and sex. Knowing this, I inflated the sexual imagery. It is meant to be houmourous. If you wish to compare, http://www.luminarium.org/sevenlit/donne/bait.php is a link to the original.

    The Jailbait

    (A Parody of John Donne’s “The Bait”)

    *** with me and by my love

    And we will some young pleasures prove,

    With golden showers and in our buffs

    We could even try using handcuffs.

    There will the river moaning and screaming play

    Warmed by thy thighs more than the sun’s ray.

    And there, my enamored whale sill stay

    Begging itself it may hold its fruitful spray.

    When mine wilts, swimming in thy bath,

    My whale, most willingly every channel hath,

    Will amourously in thee swim,

    Gladder thou caught he than that yonder him!

    If thou, with me seen, beest loath,

    Thy father and mum, thou enrageth both;

    And if myself e’er leave to have seen

    Thou art and beest…DAMN! FOURTEEN!?

    Others hath spuriously frozen with their anxious reeds;

    Been bare-ly content to spend it in the weeds,

    O! my treacherously eager whale beset

    Thy strangling snare and womanly net;

    Remove my bold hands from thy slimy nest,

    The embedded whale in thy banks must a minute’s rest,

    My curious traitor, trouser-silk fly,

    Bewitched my whale with thy wandering eye.

    For thee, surely needest to freakin’ wait,

    For thou thyself are damn surely jail-bait!

    The whale that is so caught thereby

    Needs be so much younger than I!

    3 AnswersPoetry10 years ago
  • Would you please C&C my first draft poem?

    The world darkened at my step

    And all were blinded in my wake.

    I was a feral blade

    Always seeking the penultimate wound;

    Bedighted and carried

    To impel solitude;

    Barring my potential miseries.

    I suffered and assured

    Worlds bled with me.

    Eyes rolled from

    Earth to cloud

    Hating everything between.

    I wore the twin brothers—

    Edges of the same sword—

    As a benighted badge.

    LOVE relegated

    A blood pathogen

    No practitioner could cure.

    My companionable willingness split

    Between victim and accomplice.

    4 AnswersPoetry10 years ago
  • Would you please C&C my new poem, "Lucky"?

    You asked me

    If I felt lucky:

    Lucky to have you,

    Lucky to be with you…

    Lucky.

    My answer was

    As good as silence,

    A productive string

    Of non-commital white noise

    Lacking substance

    And satisfaction.

    In my defense, indefensible

    As it is, I wished a stretch

    Longer than minutes

    To ponder,

    To remember.

    To remember

    How the gilded lady, with

    The brat in tow,

    Facilitated our pairing

    Where none was visible

    Except you.

    Then, I had no notion

    Of possibilities ahead;

    I hold no regret

    For what has passed us

    And see Fortune still smiling.

    2 AnswersPoetry10 years ago
  • What do you think of my short poem "I, Sisyphus"?

    I push,

    Shove,

    And work events

    To the pinnacle of reason;

    But I am pulled

    By horns and ring

    Beyond endurance.

    Each journey up

    Is not my penance,

    Such rolls over me

    At every finale.

    7 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • Any suggestions or comments on my new poem?

    OBSCURE AUDIENCES

    Senses designated differ

    From tongue to plume.

    Some quills scratch, as

    William’s, for faces foreign

    To reflections;

    A probation of applause

    Spurs them in linear effigy,

    Chasing the quibbles of posterity

    In pubic forms.

    Others harbor efforts

    Without aims for pleasing masses.

    Emily, iin aged fertilities, may have

    Stroked pages only for internal ears;

    Blinding tableaus

    Suffocate understanding, but prime

    Imagination.

    I own neither train,

    Yet resolutely stand amid their contraction;

    Plying scenes generated for reasons

    Abjured against audiences,

    But to jab curiosities.

    I lay to be judged by History’s

    Scribbled jury,

    With eyes looking past measured tics;

    Yet deaf to public desires and outrages.

    2 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • Comments on my rough draft poem?

    [ad]minister of rebellion

    i, as reigning fist of the vox populi,

    severed my own strings;

    i, a (s)ain’t in coward’s time

    distribute sacriligion

    while the dirty word reich

    infuses black collared corrective politics;

    where words from porno movies

    is all They want to believe—

    where innocence is counterfused with

    dirty

    filthy

    and eager.

    i, a villain necktie of the vaudevillian meatshow,

    battle against

    trivial forces fighting to be sure I am

    obscene and not heard:

    candy from the ghetto with a Snow White smile.

    but i, labeled their scaped-goat saviour

    as if sun is fixed in Their mouth,

    remain a hand of five-finger centrist view

    never shamed by blame

    for the neophyte revolt

    to cast out overestimated misunderstanding.

    3 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • Thoughts on my short poem ?

    As an exercise at a poetry group I frequent, we wrote a poem about the person sitting next to us. I had an empty seat on one side, so I wrote about who/what I saw there.

    ESCAPIST

    Hands, a folded grace

    Lying upon her lap

    Where no one else sees.

    A prim pursing of her lips

    Betrays the slighted disappointment.

    Her eyes flash

    In a muted glare

    As if to ask

    Why I have abandoned her.

    No excuses

    Nor explanations

    Placate her silent wrath.

    Perhaps it behooves

    Not to point out

    She has hidden

    From me.

    7 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • Do the I made changes to my poem work?

    I have made a few changes, namely breaks in the column o' words it once was. The breaks I chose to emphasize the questions rather than making uniform breaks. I also settled on a title: "A Momentary Lapse of Faith."

    Who is assigned the

    Duty of retrieving shards of

    Shattered identity strewn

    About Life’s stained floorboard

    Without thought,

    Without care?

    What miracle doctor shall

    Present himself to restore

    A heart, not broken, but

    With armor fissured to impotence?

    A world of glass and mirrors

    Tumbles to complete the mayhem

    Extant now in the realm

    Where gods and angels dare not roam:

    A land of girded marble

    And trees whipped bare.

    A back bowed past a

    Creaking tolerance trudges

    Down roads bearing unlit torches;

    Pausing mere moments at

    Each successive intersection

    Leading to only more questions.

    Hope remains an airy burden whose

    Heat bores down on shoulders

    Of a weary mind—

    Remains winging out of touch,

    Tickling at fingertips,

    Tormenting the needy.

    A fighter, born and made

    In and of his own principles,

    Slouches uncertain as to maintain

    The fight.

    No tears mar the face

    Tinctured in sun and blood,

    But overflow the hole

    He once relied on as home.

    Poets, even blind ones,

    Construct pretty words

    To sustain vision;

    When shadows arrest eyes

    And imprison them in visualizations

    Of their own imagination,

    What enlightened sight could cure such ails?

    Is my battle worth believing,

    Or should my marbles

    Plant themselves wherever

    They may happen to land?

    3 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • Please tell me what you think of my poem?

    I would also like some suggestions for a title:

    Who is assigned the

    Duty of retrieving shards of

    Shattered identity strewn

    About Life’s stained floorboard

    Without thought,

    Without care?

    What miracle doctor shall

    Present himself to restore

    A heart, not broken, but

    With armor fissured to impotence?

    A world of glass and mirrors

    Tumbles to complete the mayhem

    Extant now in the realm

    Where gods and angels dare not roam:

    A land of girded marble

    And trees whipped bare.

    A back bowed past a

    Creaking tolerance trudges

    Down roads bearing unlit torches;

    Pausing only moments at

    Each successive intersection

    Leading to only more questions.

    Hope remains an airy burden whose

    Heat bores down on shoulders

    Of a weary mind—

    Remains winging out of touch,

    Tickling at fingertips,

    Tormenting the needy.

    A fighter, born and made

    In and of his own principles,

    Slouches uncertain as to maintain

    The fight.

    No tears mar the face

    Tinctured in sun and blood,

    But overflow the hole

    He once relied on as home.

    Poets, even blind ones,

    Construct pretty words

    To sustain vision;

    When shadows arrest eyes

    And imprison them in visualizations

    Of their own imagination,

    What enlightened sight could cure such ails?

    Is my battle worth believing,

    Or should my marbles

    Plant themselves wherever

    They may happen to land?

    2 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • What is your opinion on my [Americanized] sonnet?

    FOR YOU

    My love for you cannot be a red rose

    For a rose--perhaps--shall wither and die;

    A crushed heap as vermilion goes,

    Charcoal dust in fallen curl to but cry--

    And a rose no purpose ever it owned,

    But to brighten the gravity of tears;

    'Twould be a sorrow only dead men condoned...

    Weeping being the broken glass of ears

    Shall echo softly in the frothy night

    As Cupid bleeds on th' morning sun lances

    And Spring morns pass on in the frozen white,

    Whilst Aphrodite on th' heart stage dances:

    For you, my dear, shall I its qualities praise;

    For you, my love, I'll honor the rose all my days.

    2 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • What do you think of my poem "A Perfect Heart"?

    A wrought iron monstrosity,

    Forged in abandoned

    Arctic crevasse, lies

    Sealed in the hoary frost of a

    Volcanic world’s ash-blotted sun—

    Away from apathetic globes;

    With a gore-fanged guardian

    Of saber-strewn jaw who remains

    Successful against all potential feelers.

    An emotional hermit

    Stolen away from a viral humanity;

    Lonely in retrospection,

    Not to the point of action,

    Seeking only to wallow in

    The flood of memory

    Infecting eyes and tongue:

    A direct contradiction of wants

    Stretched in Time’s own necktie.

    Nightly toes peek out into frigid

    Streams for another life away

    From voided recesses—

    Cursed with hesitance,

    Blinded by possibilities—

    Rush back to the safety of an

    Ignorant hope where all live

    But none survive

    To boast of their journeys.

    An unexpected star thaws prisons,

    Battalions of sun-armored warriors

    Carry light in their charge, shock

    The hardened convict to familiar beats

    Lost in unrequited desire to be forgotten,

    No longer strangled, eased in warmth and

    A pulchritude found deeper than the

    Cursory beholder bears true. A new existence

    Unsought, endowed by acquiescence to fortune.

    3 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago