my_dizzy_lizzy

Hello,

I am writing a novel (target will be 100k words) based on the story of a girls struggle with the anger and resentment she has for her father. The prologue is the story about two young girls learning of the death of their mother. The following chapter is set twenty years after this first chapter and you see how the mother’s death has affected Samantha (the main character), Iris and especially the father. It is also a love story, as the main character falls in love and how she struggles with finding that love. And finally it deals with drug addiction and the way an addiction affects not only the addict, but the people around them.

I am about halfway through the book (about 55k words written) and would love to have someone (or many someone's) review the first two chapters, let me know if it grabs your attention.

As the file is long I will need to e-mail it to you, so if you please send me a request e-mail for the document or post your e-mail address here and i will gladly send it to you.

Thanks,

Liz

My_dizzy_lizzy@yahoo.com

Hey all,

I have been toying with the idea of writing a novel for the past few years. I have finally decided to give it a go at it and shot out the first few pages. Here is my problem, I have had absolutely no writing experience past high school. I took a creative writing class in an online college but that pretty much SUCKED. I read a lot of novels so I try to pick up different styles in the books that I read, but its much harder to come up with ideas on how to create a character and bring a story to life. The topic of my novel is a bit complex... it deals with anger, drug addictions, dysfunctional families and a bit of non-vomit enducing romance...hehe

Can anyone give me any pointers? Any advice?

If anyone would like to read the first few pages and give me their input that would be fantastic too!! I have 5 pages so far so it wont fit in this screen. If you give me an e-mail address I can e-mail it and get your feedback.

Thanks all!!

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Hey guys,

I have recently been trying to lose my belly fat. I usually go to the gym and workout for about an hour and a half then go into the sauna for about a half hour. I know the Sauna only helps you lose water weight. But would it be harmful if I wore my Bollinger Solar Belt in the sauna? The Bollinger belt is claimed to help flatten your tummy by helping you sweat underneath while you workout, so does it have the same/enhanced effect if I wear it in the sauna? Any help is appreciated

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