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Hello. As you read my question, will you help me? I have done my best to revise this piece but I'm not perfect at it but this is the best I can do. Will you please help me? It's from my story on Wattpad.

"Agh!"

I shot up straight in bed, I was covered in sweat and breathing heavily. I looked all around me, trying to get a sense of where I was. Images flashed through my head all at once.

My eyes, as they focused I noticed it was just my weary bedroom. I was shaking to the bone. I sat up and felt the itchy sheets upon my dirty skin.

I could feel the air being sucked out from my body, the atmosphere becoming more and more tight. I struggled out from under the blanket covers, racing to the window. I pounded against the window until my fingers felt scrape on the window latches. With one swift movement I flipped them to the side and opened the window with all the strength left in my body. I immediately took in a huge breath of cold air.

"Sam, are you all right? You were crying out?" My brother, Kai (pronounced with the K sound and the word, I), screams out behind my door.

Shaking, I make my way past my unorganized room, well more than it was before, and open the door. There stood Kai, worried evident in his eyes.

"K-Kai" I whimper latching onto him bearing my head into his neck. Surprised by my outburst, Kai coos soothing words in my ear and rubs my back.

Hey can you please help me? I have read many but haven't found one I truly like. I don't want one you have used before or seen somewhere, please be original. I have tried too but fail because each time I try one its either taken or can't hold a certain character. Please help me.

How do you describe a fighting scene? I don't really understand how to create that simulation. Will someone help me?

The protagonist in my story is being resurrected. His name is Sam, he is a 31 year old neet from modern times that just died.

The next thing he will do is wake up as a baby from another world. This world is in the medieval times and is born in the country. Later on in the story he will be a prodigy in magic and swordsmanship, but that doesn't matter. He, when he realizes this is a new life, he will be saying that he will live life to the fullest because his old life was nothing as he was a failure in it.

An example I got from another story is,

"When I woke up, the first thing I felt was my eyes being dazzled. Light filled my vision, and narrowed my eyes in discomfort. Once my eyes adjusted to the brightness, I found a young blonde woman gazing at me.

A beautiful girl.... No, a beautiful woman would be more of an appropriate name. Who is this?

Beside her was a man with brown hair of a similar young age, giving me a stiff smile. A strong and arrogant looking man. his muscles were amazing. looking at his appearance I should have been repulsed. Strangely enough, I didn't feel he was unpleasant.

"-------- ---- ------" They chatted while gazing at me dearly..."

Remember that is what another author put and I don't want to be vandalizing her in anyway because I somewhat respect her. Can you give me another example that I can work on or use some bits and pieces?