Opinions, please?

Lollipop dreams melt fast in this inferno reality.
Open those pretty, cold blue eyes and look around. Where are your fairies & unicorns now?
I'm all that you have. No magic, just manipulation. On both sides of the sea.
So cross this tempestous ocean, if you really think you can. You be Ponce de Leon and I'll be Columbus.
Revered and cruel. This new world is ours.
When hating is so easy there's no room for forgiveness.
I need something to hold so I can let go. But don't give me your hand.
I'd rather fall.
A little Ted Hughes meets Salvadore Dali. I'll be Gala over Plath any day.

"The search for truth is more precious than its possession."
Einstein didn't know you.
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Should I work a little more on this? Is it too bitter? Thank you for reading!

Rhythm of the Falling Rain2008-07-19T06:43:12Z

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How would you like to work on the flip side of this and show us the sweeter side of things. You write well.

*Bee*2008-07-19T04:33:04Z

Work on the structure...love the bitterness by the way!

Teresa G2008-07-19T12:54:33Z

you are good at it, keep working on it. Bitter and dramatic. nice stuff

rockchick2008-07-19T04:26:11Z

Keep working on this.