poem i wrote awhile ago. how is it?

i can feel it coming.
like the change in season,
and from it im running.
in fear of losing my reason.
i try and walk it out.
i try to count to ten.
but the hate inside surmounts,
and i turn into the beast I've always been.
my mouth spits words,
that scorch and burn.
me eyes shoot speeding bullets.
when and how can they ever learn.
to let be this quiet poet?
but now i strain to keep my sanity
and laugh and sneer at my forgotten rule
just one more broken promise ive made me
to never again be angers fool

AC Tesla2008-11-24T19:49:40Z

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I'm glad to know that the fact that your poetry is abysmal will not make you angry.

Anonymous2008-11-22T23:11:34Z

This poem is a stellar piece of writing this is the kind of poem i like to read something that when you read it you it captures you with every word i know because i also write and was a song writer for a few years also, it's amazing! truly it is well done you have talent and keep writing.

Route 1162008-11-22T22:51:54Z

It's deep and expressive. Honest. Good work

Anonymous2008-11-22T23:29:45Z

If you cannot correctly punctuate your writing, nobody who is important will take it seriously: learn the rules—then appropriately bend them.

Note: http://andromeda.rutgers.edu/~jlynch/Writing/

Fly2008-11-23T00:02:31Z

IT'S AMAZING!
I would LOVE your opinion on mine:
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20081123000019AAljTaa

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