When is the best time to see the blooms?
Floating, it seems
On a hot desert wind
Silent.
Falling to the ground
There to bloom
In brightest yellow
Shot through with streaks
Of red and orange.
Beauty in the midst
Of austerity.
The observer is taken
By the spectacle
And smiles.
"Zero, this is Tango Three Zero,
Target destroyed. Over."
"Roger, Tango Three Zero,
Return to base. Out."
" Roger, ETA one hour. Out."
Smoke follows the blooms.
Letters to families
Will follow the smoke.
Thank you Margot for your comments. I agree, searing yellow sounds better, possibly followed by 'Streaked through with crimson and orange'
With regard to 'it seems..' this was deliberate as incoming rockets and missiles - if you spot them - appear to float in the air even though often travelling at 600mph+ .
I appreciate you taking the time to read and give feedback.
The whole poem was written in about 5 minutes so didn't get much editing time!
Giggles, I have friends out in Afghanistan as well. I hope your son is safe and comes home ok. The poem is generic.