A friend of mine asked me if I would put his poem up here for opinions. So here it is.?

The Eyes of Africa

In the silken shadows
on the African plain, she wakes.
Hunger presses her to rise.
Food will not come to her.
She glides as silent as the clouds.
She is on the hunt and nothing
escapes her eyes.
Clad in darkness her gaze shines
with the flame of African life.

What's your opinion?
I've already given him mine.
Thanks

2010-02-13T05:44:44Z

Well, Happy H this is what he gave me. I can't give you the rest of the story because he didn't write any more.

Metal Nettle2010-02-13T05:33:56Z

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Yes, that's very pretty, you can see it unfolding in your head.

Anonymous2010-02-13T05:31:49Z

Very nice poem, your friend is a talented poet!

Anonymous2010-02-13T05:41:08Z

It's okay. Where is the rest of the story?

Texas lady2010-02-13T05:27:41Z

I really like it! Nice write,