I would like to know if this short poem would be good as a greeting card?

You asked me how long I'd love you
and what you meant to me.
I smiled,"My heart is yours dear, look inside and see."
I opened all the pages and in words written in red.
"I'll love you longer then always."
Was only thing it said.

Seehowtheyrun, 4-4-2010

2010-04-05T06:22:34Z

Thanks to the first two answers. I want to send it to a special guy on a heart shaped card.

2010-04-05T06:32:47Z

Thanks Norris, you're right. It does work better.

Norris Green2010-04-05T06:23:20Z

Favorite Answer

change line 4 to say
"and with words written in red"

It flows and sounds better that way.

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Anonymous2010-04-05T13:15:06Z

Awwwww thts so sweet! And i think it would be Perfect as a greeting card! Hope I Helped!

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Anonymous2010-04-05T13:17:16Z

Awww it lovely it will work great.

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