What do yall think about this Poem so far?

He pulls them strings just like a puppeteer, A pull of a string can bring a girls tear, When hes done he cuts the strings of all who were near, None the wiser are the girls so there is no fear, The motives by his motion are still unclear, (TO BE CONTINUED)

Is it headed in the right direction?
Do you like it overall?

THE BANNIBAL ONE2010-07-09T20:36:44Z

Favorite Answer

as good as the canoe poem..it,s ok...ps,,yes in the right direction for the poems i like..funny and unclear...overall.too short.plus,,no action...