Rate my poem please, want to know what you think.?
Every look cuts my soul,
every thought a stake through my heart,
every touch a burning of my soul,e
very embrace just a thought.
Every thought of you,
just memoirs of what could be,
to me you'll remain as fresh dew,
always will remain in me a love for you.
Even though another is in your heart,
you've been in mine from the start,
silently you stay in my heart,
like a vine planted in my heart.
Your voice,
like a sunset in the rain,
all the sadness and joy,
all i push away in vain.
For the sadness conquers,
And my soul it sears,
as memories of you,
flood my tortured heart.
With sorrow it fights a never-ending war,
for it craves it's freedom,
gained with the presence of love,
but it's gone, leaving only it's glove.
Never ending it will be,
and never winning it's commander foresees,
always sorrowful it will be,
and always a storm in the sea.
i just wanna see what the response is from you guys. I'm an amateur by the way. Started writing a month back.