So what do you think about this poem i wrote for a girl?

You release the compassion these theives receive,
They steal your heart and flatout leave,
Leave you broken in the soul,
A wound of which will not bleed,
Bleed to release the pain from deceit,
Questions emerged by the loss of a heart beat,
Not the one the grim reaper reaps,
But the one for which blue birds peep,
The love that seems to seep,
Out of your heart to he the creep,
You Slowly ask me how to keep,
Your love inside ever so deep,
Answers I have none,
Questions I have one,
Tell me why you insist to repeat,
This one and ever so daunting feat,
For the entire world to see,
Your fails come through eternally,
The truth, it hurts as you can see,
You need a shoulder,
you've still got me.

Just give me all of your Feedback good or bad.

?2010-09-09T19:40:37Z

Favorite Answer

You've got skills man. I'm a poet as well, and a guy, and I really liked your poem.
I don't know how long it took you to write that but you sound like a natural.
Keep writing, it helps everything.

?2010-09-10T02:01:19Z

oooohh lol if a guy read that to me i would cry, its so great and she should love it. Its really creative and nicely said in my opinion.

Anonymous2010-09-10T01:59:46Z

if i was Your girlfriend i would love you for ever great

.2010-09-10T01:52:51Z

Oh, its so good . :) Im sure she will like it ,.