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“Where’s the bloody payroll?”
Scarlet MacGrath strode from the ruin of the captain’s cabin, grabbed the schooner’s captain by the front of his shirt and dug the muzzle of her flintlock into the flesh of the man’s face, up under the cheekbone. The white of his eye rolled upward. They stood against each other for a long moment, and finally he said, steady enough, ”There ain’t no payroll, the men are in on shares.”
She backed off then, half a thoughtful step, leaving the print of her pistol barrel on his cheek, and asked a little more politely, “What are you meanin’ by that?”
“I own the boat. I suspected the merchant houses of cheating us, so it bein’ the off season, I told the boys that any man who came south with me would have a percentage. I was aimin’ to sell in Jamaica.”
She lowered the pistol and gave him a little more space. “Well, I have a great respect for a man what treats his crew fair. We’ll still rob you, mind, but I will apologize about your cabin.” Litter from her search was visible through the open door, clothing and books scattered, the desk overturned, the sea chest rifled, the bunk torn apart.
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