New poem .. any honest opinions ?

Touching. Personally though, I'm not a big fan of heroic couplet rhyme schemes; they seem to make poems seem juvenile. But that's just my opinion; a lot of people like the couplets.

The rhymes are so forced that it makes the poem come out so choppy - like a kids jump rope song. There is no natural flow to it and the meter is off all over the place. Rhyming is fine, but when you do so, lines that are out of meter show up even worse.

I give it a 4. Pax - C.

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I like it. It's very personal and people can get the meaning easily. Honestly I think if you threw in some metaphors it would connect with your readers just a little bit more.

Just remember kiddo, it doesn't always have to rhyme. I think you could tell me more if you forced the rhyming less. And I like to leave the teen angst on myspace.

was it good... not sure

did i like it... ya

is it true??? wish you luck.. lots of it...

in the end you may have to add on to it i think for when she takes you for tons of money or cheats or you do the move in thing...

like i said, wish ya luck

i'm not into the whole "meeting people online" thing, but that's really cute! i like it!