i wrote a poem, and i would like you to express your opinion..?

i didn't ask this question for you to say 'IT'S GORGEOUS'. i would really like to know what you really think, and i won't mind at all if you don't like it. and i would also appreciate suggestions.

1000

sometimes,

i close my eyes

and wish i were a drop water in your sink

so i would see you when you drink

a glass of water.

and it would be like you drank me

a thousand times.

sometimes,

i close my eyes

and wish i were an old gray pen

so i would write your heart down when

you'd hold me in your hand

and write and then erase the words

a thousand times.

sometimes,

i close my eyes

and wish i were a little fly

and live in a dark corner of your room

and every day

i'd see you, how you die

a thousand times.