please somebody help me revise this paragraph. Thanks!?

I'll redo the entire paragraph and Caplock the things I would change. It is not screaming, it is the fast way of showing you what could change :

Allow me to introduce you TO A gorgeous blonde named Amy. She's currently attending Purdue University Lafayette, MAJORING in health and fitness and minoring in language arts. In November 2005, she WAS in the Purdue Dream Girls calendar. She's a very independant and strong-willed person, PLAYING MANY SPORTS INCLUDING volleyball, softball, DIRTBIKE RACING and skating. HER INTERESTS ARE VERY BROAD : She can ride dirtbikes all day and go out with her girlfriends later in the evening, all skirts and heels with not the slightess hint at what she had been doing during the day.

I rephrase the last sentence because at first I wasn't sure what you meant. The way I rephrased it might not be excellent, but it's a start.

I am pleased to introducing a vivacious, gorgeous blonde named Amy. Amy currently attends Purdue University in West Lafayette, Indiana. Amy is pursuing a Bachelor of Arts degree in Health and Fitness and supplementing her degree with a minor in Language Arts. In November 2005, Amy was selected from over 250 applicants and was chosen as one of the Purdue Dream Girls. Each candidate selected received a photo shoot and has a spotlight in the calendar. Amy is a very intelligent, hardworking independent leader. Amy is active on the intercollegiate volleyball and softball leagues. In her free time, Amy enjoys riding dirtbikes and skating. Her styles and interests are very versatile. Amy is comfortable riding dirt bikes all day and enjoys glamourous evenings out on the town in skirts and heels.

Meet Amy, the gorgeous blonde girl who is enrolled in health and fitness with minor in laguage arts at Purdue University West Lafayette. Being versatile and fashionable, she join the Purdue Dream Girls Calendar last November 2005. Amy is very independent and strong-willed person. She enjoys playing volleyball, softball and skating and most of all she can ride dirt bikes all day long together with her friends wearing skirts and heels.

I would like to introduce you to a gorgeous blond named Amy.

Amy attends Purdue University and is majoring in language arts.

She is very much into health and fitness. She plays volleyball, softball , rides dirtbikes, and skates.

She is very versatile, independent, and strong willed.

Since she is so versatile and fit, she can ride dirtbikes all day and go out with the girls, usually in skirts and heels all night.

In November 2005 she did the Purdue Dream Girls Calender