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DIY Doc asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

Analogous, and directed at "The Dark Prince" OK?

"Dark", This is obviously simplistic, but just pointing to how negative can turn.

You all thought I joked when I said I'd jump

from the Tri Borough bridge and you called me "Punk"

You were my "friends" or as close as I'd come

and even in bashing, you were better than none.

I was short and dumpy, lived a pretty lame life.

My Father was now on his new, third Wife,

You were all Uptown kids, with nice clothes

nice girlfriends and stuff up your nose.

Always last chosen in a sandlot game,

I was OK, other than being called the names.

I don't know if jumping was courage or fear

but I was so over the jibes and the tears.

No one knew me, so no one would miss me

I was "that fat kid who when we teased him, he'd "P"

I can't say at all, Life's what I wanna quit

and as I jump, a Barge passes will I land or miss it?

I can't say at all, I'll miss even one of you,

BUT I'll tease ya with Post Cards from some city in Peru. :)

Update:

Thank you all so far, the direction it was meant to take, will likely never reach it's destination, though DARK knows my subtleties and irreverence in respect.

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  • 1 decade ago
    Favorite Answer

    My heart broke during reading this. It addresses a real issue in teens. If I might tell you my favorite line-

    "I can't say at all, life's what I want to quit"

    Then add one:

    The reason I'd jump is this bull sh-t!

    I was relieved the character decided not to jump and went to peru instead. A nice, cute ending.

    Source(s): staying yummy
  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Interesting.

  • ?
    Lv 4
    4 years ago

    i like the poem very lots, yet in specific situations we actually want the item "the" or it sounds awkward. additionally, i do no longer understand the branch of your final stanza. a handbook: As existence dreained slowly from his face pooled at his toes under his place, the Angel darkish felt no shame. eternal existence mistook dying's place. (discover the apostrophe).

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