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Ok I am writing a story and I need you to tell me what you think of it! It is a little long. I will have to post some in the more details in it. And please tell me what you think of it. Thanks.

characters in the story:

Vanessa (girl) 19

Corey (boy) 17

Allison (girl) 14

Alexander (boy) 14

Elisabeth (girl) 12

Isabella (girl) 11

Jacob (boy) 9

The title is (One Mistake Made What You Pay For It)

Allison sat on the bed, thinking of what she just saw. Allison was the third oldest of seven children aged from nineteen through nine. Questions swirled her mind as she thought more of it. She thought to herself why did I let this happen to me. She decided to tell her older sister Vanessa about it. Her sister would know what to do about it. She was nineteen and, out of high school, and into her first year of college. She walked to from her room to her sister’s door, she knocked and said.

“Hey V, can I come in.” Allison said.

“Sure,” she hollered not looking up from her studies.

Allison opened the door. She went in and sat on the bed.

“Can we talk about something?”

Vanessa looked up from her work she was doing and said,

“Sure, what do you want?”

“Well, I need to tell you something, but you can’t tell mom or anyone, you promise?” She said looking around the room.

“O.K, shoot for it.”

“Well I don’t know how to tell you or anyone else this but, uh, I made a mistake a-a-and,” she didn’t finish the sentence, for her sister butted in.

“Allison, no you can’t be, please tell me you’re not.” Vanessa said shaking her head. By this time Allison was in tears when she told her sister this.

“I wish, but I am going to be, I’m pregnant.” She strained to say the last two words.

“Allison how could you?” she said fiercely, while getting up.

“I don’t know, I was pressured into doing it, it was an accident.” She said getting up to get a tissue.

“Accidents like this don’t happen. They are made on purpose. What were you thinking? Oh I’ll tell you what you were thinking; you thought if you did this it would ease your problems in life. Well Allison it doesn’t ok. How could you let this happen when your only fourteen, couldn’t you wait until you were married or at least till you were older. This is going to effect your whole life, our life. Mom is a single woman, dad isn’t here anymore. How do you expect us to do financially with seven kids and one parent and one more baby in the house? You’re going to be a mother at fourteen and you’re only in ninth grade and just starting high school. When did this happen?” Vanessa was calming her voice after the last sentence was made.

“Well about almost about two months ago,” Allison said.

“Three months ago? You mean you’re already eight weeks. Very soon your body is going to under go dramatic changes. Like morning sickness, sleepiness, and your stomach is going to grow larger. And when do you expect mom to find out about this. And what kind of role model are you going to set for Elisabeth and Isabella; you’re two years older than Elisabeth and three years older than Isabella. What kind of big sister are you going to be to them, when you’re pregnant at fourteen? Do you expect them to be a mother at your age too?”

She looked down at the ground when the question was put on her. A tear ran down her cheek when she said,

“I guess no.”

“Look, Allison, I am sorry for yelling at you, ok. I want to know who the father of this baby is?” Vanessa said as she sat down holding her hand.

“Well, he is a tenth grader, Cole Wells”

“Is he going to be in the baby’s life, have you told him you were pregnant with his baby? And how did this come to happen? Vanessa said releasing her hand to get a tissue for Allison, who has now quit sobbing.

“Well, I haven’t told him about the baby. How it happened?”

“Yes, I want to know how it happened!”

“Well in the summer my friend, Hannah, had a party and well I met Cole and it sorda just took off from their.”

“Took off from their. Why didn’t you wait till you were married? O.k. I want ask you anymore I see that you are getting sensitive to this. Well anyways, how do you expect to tell mom about this problem you have created now?”

“I don’t know. I guess some how or I can just let her guess about the pregnancy.” Allison replied to the question.

“Al, you can’t just let her guess about it. You need help with the pregnancy, you can’t do this alone!” She said getting agitated.

“I won’t be alone I have you and Cole.”

“Allison you can’t trust a guy who made you pregnant, who didn’t even want you to become with child, plus you haven’t even told him about the pregnancy.”

“And why not? We could have been planning to anyways.” She answered feisty.

“What? Why would you two plan on becoming parents at age fourteen and fifteen? Do you not get it you’re fourteen, you’re pregnant at FOURTEEN!” Vanessa said fiercely.

Allison could tell Vanessa was getting angrier as she talked to her. Allison felt something swell inside her body. The swelling inside got bigger; finally it was in her throat, like a lump. She felt as if she was going to throw up.

“Vanessa is it normal to feel something,” Allison didn’t finish her sentence. She jumped up and ran to the bathroom. When she got there she threw her hands over the toilet and threw up in it. Minutes past till finally she felt as if she could stand up. Vanessa went to the bathroom door, knocked, and said in a calm voice,

“Alli, can I come in now?”

Allison got herself up and opened the door. She walked past Vanessa without even putting an eye on her. Allison went to her room and sat their. Ways to tell her mom filled her head. She got up and sat at her computer. She pulled her email up and typed,

Dear Mom,

You are the best mom I have ever had. You love me through hard times and good times.

Well this time is going to be a hard one. I hope you still love me, through this and after. I need

to tell you this before you guess. Mom, I made a mistake and I am taking action for it. I hope you

still love me and the child inside me. It isn’t easy for me to tell you this but, I am going to become

a mother. Mom, I am pregnant.

Love,

A soon to be mother, Allison.

Before she hit the send button, Vanessa walked in the room. Allison saved the draft she had for her mother.

“So, Al, I am sorry for yelling at you.” Her sister apologized.

“That is ok,” Allison replied back.

“Anyways, I guess you don’t feel as well as you could have been, just a minute ago in the bathroom.” Vanessa said setting on the bed.

Allison got up and moved to the computer desk and replied,

“Well, I was planning to tell mom through email, here come and read it.”

Vanessa went over and read the email her sister wrote for her mother.

“Sounds good, when are you going to send it?” Vanessa said.

“I guess right now.” Allison said as she sent the email.

“O.k then I am going down stairs to see if she got the email if she does I am going to tell you when she is reading it.” She said as she went out the door.

Vanessa went down stairs to find Corey at the computer.

“Corey, come here.”

“V, I am busy with my homework.”

“Your homework isn’t minesweeper. Now get over here I need to tell you something.” She said as she was looking out the door to see if their mother was home.

Corey got up from the computer and walked over to Vanessa was standing.

“What?” he said in a bored kind of voice, leaning over on the counter.

“Is mom home?”

A tear streamed down Allison’s face as she said,

“Vanessa, I don’t want to have a baby at this age. I can’t take care of it. I want to be a normal teenager, with a normal life. I can’t take the throwing up, the back pain, the stomach pain; it hurts so bad, I can’t take it anymore.” She said as she began to cry now.

Vanessa got up and gave her sister a hug. They both went back to sit on the bed.

“Look, I hate to say this but, you made this situation, and I going to help you out of it. But mom, I, Corey, Alexander, Elisabeth, Isabella, and Jacob will be here for you, through the pain and the suffering, thick and thin. You won’t be alone, got it.”

Allison looked up and said,

“Promise?”

“Well, I know I promise.”

Allison had quite crying and giggled as her sister said that.

“See, you’re going to have laughs still, enjoy the pregnancy, you don’t have to take care of the baby just yet. So, how are you planning to tell mom, and the others?” her sister said.