what do you think of my other story?

this story is a little duifferent than ones i ussually write. i wrote it a couple of years ago for english, hope you like it and tell me what you think. please!

A Little Adventure

"Run!" yelled Kaya's mother as she bound toward her. Hunters were gaining ground as they ran after her mother. Kaya looked around for a place to hide but found none. She took off toward the river as she heard a gun shot ring through the air.

"Kaya, keep running!" shouted her mother. Kaya whipped her head around to see her mother wrapped in a thick net. She wished she could stop and free her mother but continued as instructed. Next thing Kaya knew, she toppled down a steep embankment. Kaya landed with a thud and darkness closed in around her.

Kaya woke to the gentle lap of the river as it reached out and licked the rock in front of her.

"What happened?" she wondered. Looking up, the baby panda discovers a high river embankment looming above her.

"Mama!" Kaya screamed, but received no reply. She wept. The panda sat still for a moment then began the steep climb from where she had fallen. Kaya looked but saw no sign of her mother. She was lost. Kaya rest her little black nose upon the ground and began to sniff; looking for the path the hunters had taken. She found it.

"Those weird two-legged animals must have taken Mama." Kaya reasoned. She resumed sitting and looked to the sky. The sun was falling in the west, so Kaya decided to wait until morning to resume the search for her mother.

Kaya woke early and ate a filling breakfast of bamboo shoots. "Well, here I go." she said with a hard gulp. Kaya took a step forward and headed in the direction she hoped her mother has taken.

By midday, Kaya became tired and hungry. Her tiny paws hurt.

"I'll never find Mama!" cried Kaya. Suddenly, she noticed a weird grumble and roar. There before Kaya stood, what looked like, a large metal monster; for she had never happened upon a truck before. Kaya then ventured to the rear of this so-called monster and sniffed a wheel. All of the sudden the monster roared and spit smoke. She watched the men, who captured her mother, crawl out of the "head" and approach the back of the green monster. Kaya had to hide. Taking a deep breath, she closed her eyes and jumped in the air toward the monster. Thud!

Kaya opened her eyes on impact and stared into the darkness. Quickly she scrambled deep into the darkness and hid from view. Kaya felt something soft. It was her mother! Kaya squeaked with excitement only to quickly cover her mouth when she remembered the hunters.

"Mama," whispered Kaya.

"Kaya, my darling," cried her mother wrapping Kaya in her two big black arms.

Then Kaya thought, "I have to get Mama out of here, but how?" CRASH!

Kaya noticed the sudden blackness in the monster's "stomach". Carefully she ventured to the spot that had once been the entrance. Kaya gave the barrier a little growl and placed her front paws against the cold metal. Gently pushing, Kaya realized it was stuck tight. Her mother came to her side and pushed ten times harder than Kaya. Her mom humphed, and as soon as she sat down the monster lurched forward. Kaya became frightened. Then she heard a soft jingle on one side of the barrier that separated her from her destination outside. Kaya wobbled toward the sound and saw a silvery rusted chain. She wiggled the handle, which was beside the chain. Kaya hoped it would remove the obstacle, which stood before her. Pulling it toward her Kaya fell backward and the barrier swung open, exposing the sun. The little panda sat there for a moment and pondered the situation.

"Jump! The forest floor will cushion your fall," yelled Kaya's mother. Kaya did as her mother wished and jumped, her mother following. They watched the truck monster roll away from their spot on the rain forest floor. The pandas stood and ran into the forest as the monster left. Kaya was elated she found her mother. After all, she is just a baby.