Would anyone care to judge my Myth? I'm bored and I felt like writing a Greek Myth?

It's pretty good.

My school had us do myths too. But that was years ago, so I dont really remember mine too well. (It had something to do with friendships, a dyrad being slain, mythical creatures and why you cant find/see them and roses)

Really good job just one thing

Wolfane soon* fell in love with a female dog and breeded with it. Cabela soon* came back to the creature Wolfane and took him as a pet. Wolfane would soon* die and all wolves would follow Cabela and Cabela's orders only.

Try to find some other word that just soon, I feel like it is over used. You could use eventually, quickly, one day, shortly after, ect.

But other than that it's good.

Dear Ben P:

I will judge this not on an English level (grammar, spelling, puncutation, etc.), but instead on its Greek myth qualifications (or lack thereof).

While Apollo and Artemis are twin siblings, there is plenty of incest all over Greek mythology, so it is technically acceptable in this context. I just thought I'd point out that you havet his Cabela fellow chasing after his auntie.

Cerberus is the guarddog of the Underworld. Why do you have the beastie in the woods? If you are intent on having Cabela attack Cerberus (poor puppy), then take this into consideration: Cerberus has a sweet tooth for cake. Perhaps have Cabela distract the multi-headed dog with some cake, then attack it.

If Cabela thinks that there is "no was {sic} he could on the beast and live," then why did he take Cerberus on in the first place, when he had all three heads? On that note, how does one lop off a giant, snarling head with an arrow?

Hmm. I don't know what to say about the wolf thing, except that if Hades can create a body for a severed head, why couldn't he just put it back on the neck-stump? I suppose that would ruin your thing about the wolves, though, so I shrug instead.

Okay, Cabela stumbles on Artemis bathing while out teaching his dogs (err, wolves) to hunt. Cabela is a famous, great hunter. Wait, I smell copy pasta coming on! Hold on tight!

Actaeon, the legendary huntsman of Greek myth, a grandson of Cadmus. During a hunt, he left the party and wandered alone through the forest when he suddenly came upon a clearing. There he saw the goddess Artemis bathing in a large pool, surrounded by her nymphs. When they noticed the hunter they flew themselves before the goddess, but he had already seen her splendid nakedness. Angered, she turned him into a stag for she refused to let any mortal say that he had seen Artemis naked. Actaeon moved away from the clearing feeling different and confused, not yet realizing what had happened to him. The truth hit him when he saw his own reflection in a river and he knew he was no longer human. In the distance he heard the sound of his own hounds. A brief moment of joy quickly turned into fear when he realized they were hunting him now, not recognizing their former master. He fled but was eventually overrun and torn to pieces. (pantheon.org)

If we ignore the oh-so-striking similarity in the Greek myth of Actaeon and Artemis, and instead only focus on how Artemis reacted to Actaeon's peeping tomfoolery... then we know that she is not the type to run and flee.

Cheers,

C.

A.) Artemis, when caught bathing, will kill the man (or did in the past). This is because she is chaste and has a long history of not only punishing those who see her naked but those who attempt to seduce her or her nymphs. Also, in Greek mythology originally, it was Selene who was Goddess of the moon (Artemis later became associated, much as Apollo became associated with Helios God of the Sun). However, she was slightly less chaste, so may be a better candidate for your heroes love interest.

B.) Heracules wrestled Cereberus unarmed (and won) as part of his labours. Your story would either have to mention this or choose another monster. If you keep Cereberus, your hero could attempt to repeat Heracules's achievement, and fail (Greeks love an arrogant man laid low, even Heracules their favourite was ridiculed from time to time) Your hero could resort to using a weapon and cutting off a head, and Hades punishes him for cheating by created the Wolf-whatever-things.

WHY DOES EVERYBODY HAVE TO BE SO MEAN???Hers the thing my friend,It is not entirely a terrible myth.If its your first one it is actually pretty good.Yes it is a little bit boring but that does not by any means make it terrible.I also personally beleive your use of language is almost a little too modern but i think if you could figure out a way to make it sound more "ancient"I say keep plugging away at it,it seems to be something you are passionate about and don't let people deter you from writing if thats what you want to do.

No Offense But That Really Did Kinda Suck

No Offense Man But Yeah

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Missing punctuation, unnecessary capitalizations (unless you're speaking German, and you're not), repetitive sentences, no paragraphs, ambiguous wording in several places, incorrect usage of the word "ceased" (you meant "seized"), "breeded" isn't a word, etc, etc.

Cabela is a hunting and fishing thrift store, by the way. The name isn't even Greek. Neither is Wolfane. The word "wolf" itself is German. The Greek equivalent is "lycos".

ha yeah that's cool it sound interesting and it has a meaning to it i like it. just give a little more detail about why he wanted love and whats else did he do for artemis what made him like her

Myths are not the same as fairy tales.