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Dido
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Dido asked in Education & ReferenceHomework Help · 1 decade ago

How do I punctuate this sentence so it is grammatically correct?

How do I punctuate this sentence so it is grammatically correct?

"There is an idea that has plagued America for almost a century, an idea which has lured many into a trap, one that has poisoned the minds of ambitious men and women, regardless of their class, gender, or ethnicity."

Thank you

Update:

You guys sure? Grammar nazi, you forgot a comma after your list of "class, gender, and ethnicity." I'm afraid to trust you...

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
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    There is an idea that has plagued America for almost a century; an idea which has lured many into a trap; one that has poisoned the minds of ambitious men and women regardless of their class, gender and ethnicity.

    Source(s): You could use a semicolon or a dash. And in the last bit, I replaced the 'or' with 'and', since all of them are being disregarded.
  • 1 decade ago

    The problem is that it's too long. You need to break it up. Here's one way:

    "There is an idea that has plagued America for almost a century, an idea which has lured many into a trap. It has poisoned the minds of ambitious men and women, regardless of their class, gender, or ethnicity."

    Here's another way:

    "There is an idea that has plagued America for almost a century. This is an idea which has lured many into a trap. It has poisoned the minds of ambitious men and women, regardless of their class, gender, or ethnicity."

    Source(s): Me
  • 1 decade ago

    I believe it's technically correct as it's written. It could be either condensed or split into multiple sentences for clarity, but sticking to your request to modify this sentence, I would say something like:

    "There is an idea that has plagued America for almost a century, an idea that has lured many into a trap, poisoning the minds of ambitious men and women without regard to class or ethnicity."

    I took out "gender" since you had already made a point to say "men and women". An alternative would be:

    "There is an idea that has plagued America for almost a century, an idea that has lured many into a trap, poisoning ambitious minds without regard to class, gender, or ethnicity."

    The other changes I made are just a matter of preference.

  • 1 decade ago

    The first answer has no idea what he is talking about. I've had most of the college english. Semicolons are followed by a list. They don't belong in your sentence.

    Try this: There is an idea that has plagued America for nearly a century, an idea that has lured many into a trap: a trap that has poisoned the minds of ambitious men and women regardless of their class, gender, or ethnicity.

    No comma after women.

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  • 1 decade ago

    How many different ways do you think there are? hah well here is a good mixed option...

    Why would you want to make this one sentence?

    "There is an idea that has plagued America for almost a century, luring many into a trap; poisoning ambitious citizens minds regardless of their class, gender, or ethnicity."

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Looks good to me as it is.

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