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what do you think about my third poem?

You have to go,

leaving me with sorrow,

whether you agree or not?

to allow the kisses flies..

you knew more than that,

that everything is cheap,

than your lovely hug and cherish touch..

This time,

we have to move along different path,

sacrifice is a must,

because life will only bright,

when we suddenly feel the miss,

and the need...

Update:

PLEASE DONT BE SO RUDE LIKE THAT ORANGE STAR GLASSES..SOOOO UGGLYY...

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  • 1 decade ago
    Favorite Answer

    I think it would sound better like this:

    Why did you have to go?

    Leaving me will all these sorrow

    I cant say yes or no

    to allow those kisses pass by

    you knew i hated that

    but everything is cheap

    yet your lovely hug

    and cherish touch

    will never be forgotten

    But now

    things changes

    sacrifice for the better

    because life happens once

    use it well, don't stop

    keep moving on...

    Source(s): chris hizon and yeah im just 13 thanks for your answer in my poem :)
  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Who cares??? You did not say much, honey. Sounds like you are disturbed from a Love gone wrong. Stop wasting time writing poems...DUH!! Looks like you need to takes stock in your life and get on a good path. Go to a counselor and find out who you are. Even God can't change the past....wake up and move on.

    Source(s): Common Sense
  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    I think that sounds great!

    Wanna help me with my poem?

    http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AtGJt...

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