What do you think of these three paragraphs?

Reasonably well-written, but I agree with the other answers that there's not much to hold the reader's attention. You have to give the reader some reason to care about Emmaline and what happens to her; otherwise they're going to stop reading. The usual way to do this is to present some sort of conflict or problem that stands between her and her happiness, or the happiness of someone she cares about. It doesn't have to be very big or significant - it could be as trivial as whether it's cold enough to wear a cardigan today (but all my cardigans clash with the blouse I'm wearing, and if I take the time to get changed, I'll be late).

Some of the details are good - the way Jen pulled strings to get the lockers she wanted (which makes me curious as to what sort of influence she has), and the way Emmaline butchers the French language. Most of the rest seems no different in substance from any other student's day, and so doesn't need to be there. It doesn't show her personality - you do that by having her interact with other characters.

If your plot doesn't start until she goes home, that's where your story should start. It's OK to write a couple of chapters where nothing much happens so that you, the author, can get to know your characters. But once the book's finished, have the courage to go back and cut them, and work any necessary information from them into later chapters.

It's a good start, but you don't really 'get' Emmaline from her schedule. Sure, she likes art and history, but you haven't told us what she looks like, what she's like (happy, depressed, quick-tempered, quiet...) I know this might not be the first paragraphs, but you might want to add more details. You could also add more to the car ride, like a conversation that lets us see how Jen and Emmaline act together, or Emmaline looking out the window and going off into thoughts about her home life, or other details about her.

Other than that, it's pretty good, and has smooth, easy transition. One thing: You say that Emmaline has to run from French to History, but Art is between those two classes, so that's a little confusing there.

I think that most of this is excess information. You don't have to have Emma go to school just to show us her personality, we'll pick it up as your story progresses, and by how she reacts and speaks to people. I think that there are some awkward sentences, because of extra adjectives like in this sentence,"Although I detested French because I butchered every word I tried to pronounce, I survived it because Jen and a few of our other friends were in my class too." Detested and butchered are kind of awkward adjectives to use, especially in that sentence. Do you think like that? Just saying... I don't think that you need the "school scene" at all. Your readers will pick up her personality as by her actions and the way she speaks, as the action and your story progresses. I wish you good luck with your story! =)

~MyClockworkHeart

You need more... what's it called... I like the part about pulling a few strings for the lockers, and the butchering words in French. You need more "jazz"! That's it.

One tip I'll give you (constructive criticism!) is to not write in lists. When I read over that it kind of sounds like a list. We did this and then that and then that. That is likely to bore readers and I think it would bore me too if I read it in a book. You need to either cut to the chase (skip unneeded events) or add things in between that will spice it up... like maybe dialogue.

It's very blunt. I never like writing that just throws a bunch of pointless information at me like that. I don't think you should list all her classes, it's redundant. You can always leave some out, or maybe show her in one of the classes for more character development? It definitely needs a little work, but keep going! :)

i for my part am now not keen on first man or woman, however that is your alternative. to the leisure: it is vitally brief. i believe you would make every of the ones tiny paragraphs a for much longer one. now you simply throw round with brief information approximately the man. you write approximately how his dad and mom didnt wish him or his siblings. you would upload a few extra element there for instance. like, what number of different undesirable kids did they have got? why didnt his mom have an abortion? how used to be he an coincidence? (in which his dad and mom bothered young adults who dont realize whatever approximately birth control, or top on meth or....) total, satisfactory notion

I dont you think you see use her name twice in the second paragraph other then that I think ur a good writer keep up the good work, also in the third paragraph you use the word English two times right after another I would only use it once.