What do you think of this poem?

The poem is very well-written and heart-felt, but I must disagree with the premise. We become our own jailers, often, and it up to us to grab the key right there in our hands and open that jail cell.

For what it's worth, the personality you describe is all-too-common and you are by no means alone.

But keep one thing in mind...God is not too fond of tyrants, and it always seems to end badly for them.

Write on!!

For me a poem has to have rhythm. It does not always need to rhyme but it surely demands to hit my feelings. I believe readability of expression is major as good. I do not love to moment wager what I'm studying approximately. I consistently appear for what I time period "poetic gem stones"within the textual content.

I think your poem is better than even you may think...the final stanza is extremely poetic, mature, inspired even. Why? because you've synthesized the entire human condition...the push/pull of emotion where you want the good without the bad, but are willing to accept the bad in order to have the good...even though you "know" you're going to be craving the improbable in case it's not impossible...perfect!

Nicely done...you get a star! ...keep writing!

Truly I believe that is a really nice poem to express how u feel when ur upset,mad,or stress! I really love this poem! GREAT JOB! It really made me feel calm and relaxed to forget all my bad memories! I LOVE IT!