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is my thesis good or bad?

its a cause and affect research paper....thesis statement is the last sentence.

President Barack Obama presented a 3.8 trillion dollar budget for the fiscal year 2011, which includes a hefty 1.56 trillion dollar deficit in the budget. With a record in government spending and a hefty deficit, the U.S government should stop overspending because the U.S debt is increasing.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    I wouldn't say "hefty" twice in the same paragraph.

  • 1 decade ago

    Well in terms of getting the point across it gets the job done. I'm assuming this a subjective paper and not an English class writing sample so the fact that your thesis is anything but "exciting" probably doesn't matter.

    Oh and btw, your argument is easier said than done. But that's a debate for another place and time.

  • 1 decade ago

    it seems too direct. try not to have too much of your opinion in it

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