whatcha think of this short story I wrote?

It's a beginning of an idea... you are on to something that can be quite extrodinary. Authors sometimes have wierd ways with coming up with a story. It can be a simple thought like a person falls down and a hand reaches out to them. That sort of thing. Your writing reminds me of poetry in a way. Very beautiful. It is easily relatible to the reader. Although it talks about hands to the reader it can come across to a broad topic of life. Even though ppl might not think it is considered a "story" it truly is. It is a story of life. Going through it. i love it. Great and talented writer at heart! Keep on writing. I know i will... if i didn't it would be hard to live. I don't care how cliche tht sounds but it is true lol.

Wonderful!

I hav no suggestions. Although i do have a thought. If u wanted to make this a more longer story like a novel you could possibly write about the suffering of a character u would make up and how they lived life.

Hope i helped! hehe ;0 painting words since 2010

- Word Painter

I don't think its a story, but I loved it. I loved all the detail you put into it and it was very beautiful. I wonder what inspired you to write this?? Loved it you shud be a writer. I think u shud try making it longer somehow. ;)

Not really a story, but it's very beautiful.

Niice! you incredibly have distinctive room to proceed. perchance teagen's friends gang up on you. perchance you get suspended reason he acts like it hurts greater then it incredibly does. or possibly you grow to be friends. average, it grow to be fairly stable. the sole question I even have is the place grow to be the instructor in all this?¿?¿?