how's this paragraph? honestly?

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Death is not the greatest of evils; it is worse to want to die, and not be able. To watch your love ones perish—to know that you’ll never get the chance to see them again in eternity, or wherever it is you go— is the saddest thing about our way of life. If I could go back, to that stormy winter night, I would have rather gone down and drowned in the sea then be here today, living. I would have gone down to the sea where the cool surging waves would have carried me into blessed oblivion, as my body became limp and numb, deserted by my soul as it floated away. To live in secret as the rest of the world around you lives, ages, dies, while you sit around unable to waste away. No hope, no love, no joy, no anything in that kind of life.  For immortality is a fate far worse than any death ever imaginable.

CDB · Accepted Answer

It's not depressing. It's philosophical. Tolkien made similar observations about his elves, but he used only brief comments to get the point across.
Anne Rice also let the reader know that immortality can get tiresome. But, again, she didn't drone on about it through the whole "Interview with the Vampire".
If this paragraph is a lone aside in a book that has lots of action, it could be appropriate. If the whole book goes on and on like this, it will get old fast.

Alicia · Answer

its very good, deep and (as that other person said) philosophical. you have a gift for writing down your thoughts in such a beautiful, brief paragraph. not many people have that, or if they do then they usually  drag on, but you don't! so yay! very good!

? · Answer

Depressing... but good I would soooo read it.

Anonymous · Answer

depressing, isn't it?

the paragraph was good, overall.

? · Answer

uh i think ur trying to hard to be all "deep".... but its ur paragraph, its ur thoughts.

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