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Do you like the poem I wrote?
Thee End
By: Kaeleigh Pannell
Lookin outside its so dark and cloudy
thats how it feels all around me,,
Tryna run from thee pain
but I always get stuck in the pouring rain,,
Thee past is the past well the past is yesterday,,
so fresh in my mind its like a test and im failing
this @#$% just aint availing,,
Now look outside and its hailing
I've lost it so im mailing,,
Thee heart I just ripped out of my chest
straight to your door thee exact address
do you want me now that im dead and gone
and our only memories are cold and hard,
, now im trailing six feet under
my veins are cold,but my heart is colder
for thee rest of your life you will hear
the beat of thee heart that you helped shear
and it will cry all my tears,,
You should have saw thee blood spatter
all over the wall
in such pretty patterns,,
I saw them because my sight it lingered
and I traced the lines with my little finger
,,I hope it says I love you which is what I tried to write
but my memory is so foggy now that I have died
It was originally a rap I made but I turned it into a poem so I could enter it in a contest lol
9 Answers
- DesireeLv 59 years agoFavorite Answer
I did some slight editing (grammar fixing) so it is considered more of poetry (:
Looking outside, it's so dark and cloudy
That's how it feels all around me,
Trying to run from the pain
But I always end up in the pouring rain,
The past is the past, well it's yesterday
So fresh in my mind, it's a test - and I'm failing
This **** is just not availing
Now look outside, you can see that it's hailing
I've lost everything, so now I'm mailing
The heart, it just came out of my chest
Straight to your door, thee exact address
Do you want me now that I'm dead and gone
And our only memories are cold and done
Well, now I'm trailing, six feet under
my veins are cold but my heart is like thunder
For the rest of your life, you will hear
the beat of my heart that you helped to shear
It will cry all my tears
You should have seen my heart shatter
All over the walls
Was everything spattered
I saw them because my sight it lingered
and I traced the lines with my little finger
I hope it says "I love you" which is what I tried to write
But my memory is so foggy, now that I have died
I think it's really good btw!(:
- World EaterLv 69 years ago
Nah. I took too many Literature classes to take new age teen poetry seriously.
- Anonymous9 years ago
Excellent. Kinda depressing though.
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- Anonymous9 years ago
Very good. I'm impressed. Keep up the good work.
- Anonymous9 years ago
cool poem bro
- Anonymous9 years ago
You need prompt professional help.
- Anonymous9 years ago
its great, better as poem