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Opinions on the poem I wrote recently- no title yet :)?

the poem has no title yet as you can see but maybe someone could help with that also. honest answers please, i see this being more than a hobby for me in the future. thanks in advance :)

Your touch amplifies my thoughts, mesmerizes as a reminder to come back.

Sensual selflessness as my hands can't help but to search for more of your bottomless being.

Kisses caress, swallowing my secrets and shadows.

Pillow talks and you entice me.

Beautiful eyes speak slow say you've missed me; lost in them with tongue tied treachery because saying "i love you" is so limiting and never enough for me.

Today's, tomorrow's fantasy. Eye's closed and you are all i see. I can't let it go, so i'll never let it be.

You don't have to promise me, enlighten me with your honesty and honestly I never expected to be..

in love with you, dreaming about you or even anything to you and yet you promise i am; and to be anything is more than enough for me because you're an angel to me, a beauty to me.

Stuttering while I mispronounce love because I struggle to find a way to say it without a "u" and "m-e" Missing you because i can't stand the space between you and me. The space between you and me turns us into a mystery but i can't let it go so i'll never let it be. come back to me and let's just be

You and Me. '

Let's just be the two who never fall apart, understand each other with no need to talk, the one i share my secrets to, cry to, cry for, never let go for forever and more.

More and more, i get lost in you. The way you grip, shake and scream tells me you're lost in me too. Don't promise me forever us two, tell me I left you in a state you could never undo so i can relate to you, lay with you, explore your mind state and remind you there's so much to me and there's so much to you- i could swear we're never ending. Peak again and you pique my interest again, giving you my all until your wits end. Sleep it off and present yourself in today's, tomorrow's fantasy.

An angel to me, a beauty to me.

Eye's closed and you are all i see.

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  • 9 years ago
    Favorite Answer

    it's long! But it's a good poem. :)

    Source(s): my personal opinion
  • 9 years ago

    Great poem i loved it. You should title it "Loving Me Is A Promise"

  • Anonymous
    9 years ago

    It's too damn long and I got bored after the first few lines. If it doesn't rhyme, then it's not that fun.

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