I'm writting a story, does it sound good?

See, the first time I read this, I thought you meant the little girl was the main character, so I was like "What? Why the hell is a six year old in a love triangle?!". So I had to read that again and now I see that you mean the little girl's guardian angel is the main character and not the six year old.

That aside, I think that so far you have a very good plot (although, as has been said, the "love triangle" sub plot line is very overused, but having the little girl in there changes it up so congrats on that). I also agree with whoever said that you should include demons to add more conflict to what's going on.

I'd buy it. :)

Six year old is immature & would have a crush, not necessarly "love" the clild doesnt know what love is. Love mack & cheese,ice cream,play time etc. She is taught to follow God & have good moral character(through stories interperted) Where & what are they teaching in your fligh by night church, too much plate collecting & not enough good moral fiber from the Bible to apply to everyday issues that a six year old might encounter like dont talk to strangers( jesus was a stranger, trying to spread the word?)say no to smoking,drugs & alcohol (wine & crackers served at the front pulpit) bad habbits . The angel that fell was satan, (is Seth evil?) If its you ask? It will all work out. If not add some age & make the character a teenager.

So far it sounds decent, I sense I twilight-eque-love triangle? not that thats a bad thing when it comes to selling books, but you may want to make that subplot a little more original, as when a lit agent reads it he/she may shrug at it. ALSO add demons into the story as villains who threaten the girl, and maybe an angel can turn out to be a fallen angel who was tricking the girl. Just a thought. Good luck.

A little cliche for my tastes. I'm a little hunkered down on mythology. I see angels as somewhat emotionless(and genital-lacking), so the whole falling in love aspect doesn't suit me.

One question: Is the six year old girl the one who is in love with the angels? You seem to be talking about two girls, but only specify one(a six year old).

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Very good story. Not my type (One side will be left behind in the end, i.e. sad ending) but good.

Not so good for a long story though. You won't be able to get much points, if you know what i mean.

I think there's no way to judge whether the story is any good or not, until you start writing it and bringing your characters to life. You also need to check your spelling. Writing has one 't' in it.

Cool story bro lol. But seriously, it does sound interesting.

sounds interesting, and original unlike most of what comes out these days. i'd read it. read mine?

http://quizilla.teennick.com/stories/23648361/the-...

thanks and good luck~

(btw Quizilla is a great website to post stories to link to and for people to read and rate.)

I think it's pretty decent. I would read it :D Good luck in writing!