How close would my poem be to an actual rap song?

I got chills and a fever and my knees wobble bad,

The thumping noise in my head is making me sad

My hair stands on end and my skin is warm to touch

I'm sweating all over and it's getting all too much.

I can't sleep at night but I'm dozing all day long

My mind is unclear so there must be something wrong

I can't stand the light that is shining in my face

I feel like I'm stuck somewhere out of place

My appetite is gone and I'm thirsty all the time

I've tried the lemon tea with a single slice of lime

My stomach growls angrily and aches like a pain

It's getting so much now that I think I'm now insane.