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What is grammatically wrong with this sentence?
Spell check says this sentence is "fragmented"
The hallway closet overflows with photos of us sitting on beaches, hiking random trails, and posing in front of historical landmarks.
Is there something wrong and how could i revise it?
Thanks for the resposes :) I thought it looked ok too but i wanted to make sure
4 Answers
- 9 years agoFavorite Answer
Okay the reason spell check says that is because your sentence doesn't flow. People use commas without knowing their full purpose. A comma is used to signal where, when reading aloud, you would take a breath. A full stop is where you pause and breathe. A dash is where you pause slightly etc. All that's wrong is your comma placement. Here it is revised:
The hallway closet overflows with photos of us; sitting on beaches, hiking random trails and posing in front of historical landmarks.
Or you could use
The hallway closet overflows with photos of us, sitting on beaches, hiking random trails and posing in front of historical landmarks.
Where there is different uses of commas/colons after the word 'us'
Source(s): Hope this helps! - Anonymous9 years ago
It's a little awkward, but it's correct.
- Anonymous9 years ago
Reads fine to me.
