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HELP WITH MY STORY?? Please!!?
I have so many titles, storylines, and characters running through my head and I finally(may have) found some that clicked!
Title: Plaid, Passion, and Pistols
Blurb to read: You would never think that anything bad could happen here. A private school. Year round. No summer trips. We all live in our dorms. In a small little nobody town. We can't even show our knee caps! But some horrifying things happened in Throod Appardee High School. Like the 'incident' between Fiona and Mr. Scott, which reoccurs every Friday. The protesting lead by two mysterious boys. And everything completely changed when I found my sister's body in Jim's locker. But that's not all the drama that happens in my world full of plaid.
What do you think? I think it's okay. I may change it a little(lot). But so at does it sound good? Any suggestions for improvement would be greatly appreciated! Also it's going to be mainly a murder mystery with some twists and turns in there(if you couldn't tell)
Anything is greatly appreciated!
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- 9 years agoFavorite Answer
Blurb to read: You would never think that anything bad could happen here. A private school. Year round. No summer trips. We all live in our dorms. In a small little nobody town. We can't even show our knee caps! But some horrifying things happened in Throod Appardee High School. Like the 'incident' between Fiona and Mr. Scott, which reoccurs every Friday. The protesting lead by two mysterious boys. And everything completely changed when I found my sister's body in Jim's locker. But that's not all the drama that happens in my world full of plaid.
How does a body fit in a locker and why did you bust in Jim's locker?
The idea is good but I think it's better to find a dead body in the girl's toilet. Do you like gory stories that much? Good luck.....make music with words ♫ ♫
Source(s): I write too - 9 years ago
I think you need to explain more how Jim relates to the story, like who he is and what was his relationship to you before this happened. And instead of "small little nobody town" say something like "In a town where there's nothing exciting, everything is normal everyone knows everyone, we keep to ourselves". I hope that helps(:
