This an excerpt forms short story I'm writing. Review!?

It's from the first part of a horror short story, it's not the first paragraph! I hope to get famous so I don't want to tell you the summary or what it's about other than its at a funeral. Don't comment on anything like "it'll work better another way" or whatever. Just tell if you would read it or you like the tone:

"On the other side of the room, Charles Linder helped himself to the bar. The bartender was told via “Will of the Deceased” that there was no limit to drinks and that all payments would be taken care of by said deceased. Charles took great advantage of this by drinking whatever came into his glass. He wasn’t allowed to decide. No one was. The Will specified what will be drunken and at what time. The only choices were to drink or not to drink. And Charles drank."