Please read my, "If Heaven Was A Mile away"?

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If Heaven was a mile away

I'd have my satchel waiting by the gate

I'd be overly anxious to get in

Because I hate to wait

I'd be on pins and needles

To get behind those pearly gates

But beyond the pearls

I'd wonder what awaits

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It`s a novel attitude, definitely!
And so it`s a good poem though a brief case of naivety too I reckon...:
and it made me smile...:)

x

plus I guess distance aren`t your strong point -we are travelling the mile
and haste is not customary <3

7.5/ 10

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I would tell you what awaits

Behind the magic of Heaven's gates,

Though sadly your rhyming scheme is so abhorrent,

That it looks like you've signed your own death warrant.

So into the pit of hell you shall go

Because your shitty rhymes bring nothing but woe

So a reminder to poets whose rhymes really suck, 

Don't show them to us, we don't give a ****.

HD · Answer

Spacing - good.

edit - was it just my poor deluded mind or did you change fom Solace to a 22 year old?  heehee

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Please read my, "If Heaven Was A Mile away"?

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